Hi again, I have this manuscript now updated and current version is number 3. Let’s talk about it and please let me know if something doesn’t work or what parts do you especially like.

Manuscript:

Act 1 – Sam’s office

Sam was listening radio at 1:00 PM. This was a tradition for Sam as that time every weekday radio was broadcasting “The Prankster’s Radio Program”.

SAM

Hilarious, what a good show again!

RUPEN

Are you ready to leave and meet Mr. Notsob?

SAM

Let’s go!

Rupen started their beautiful Norton Multivan with a big 6.0 V8 Engine. After a short drive they arrived to absolutely a ridiculous big gated area where Mr. Notsob had builded his imprerium.

NOTSOB

Welcome to “The Molten World”.

SAM

Thank you. Why have you used name Molten World?

NOTSOB

Well, don’t you recognize the buildings. I got vision from Salvador Dali’s pictures.

RUPEN

Well, I definetely see that buildings roofs looks like they are melting and dripping down the ceilings of the buildings.

NOTSOB

That’s correct, and your name is?

RUPEN

Rupen.

NOTSOB

Sam, you got a clever co-worker here. You should learn something from him. You both should come to work in my company. I would call us as “The Terrible Trio”. Hahahahahhaahhaa.

ACT 2 – “America’s secret weapon”

Notsob was leading Sam and Rupen to a oval office. There were Salvador Dali’s paintings everywhere and in the center of the room was a glass showcase which looked empty.

NOTSOB

Welcome to my precious.

SAM AND RUPEN TOGETHER

What a collection!

NOTSOB

I have insured the paintings for a value of 100 million dollars. Hahhahhhaahhhaaa….
but those are not my precious.

Sam and Rupen slowly walked towards Notsob who was standing beside the glass showcase. There was a small golden plaque that read “The Rarest Secret in the World”.

SAM

What is it, the showcase is empty?

NOTSOB

Is it?

RUPEN

I don’t see anything there.

Notsob touches his massive ring and a small cube rises from the bottom of the showcase.

NOTSOB

This small cube holds material which can destroy a whole city.

SAM

Why you have something so dangerous like that and why you are showing it to us?

All of the sudden the room lightning changed to red and one of the biggest paintings turned 180 degrees revealing a display that read “Destination X”.

RUPEN

What is this all about?

NOTSOB

You two are so dummies, don’t you know I want to destroy everything you love.

Peter interrupts Sagary who is reading the manuscript.

• I don’t want to sound rude, but is things happening too quickly here.

• What you mean?

• Well there is only maximum two pages of text which is around 2 minutes of film. Should we introduce the main characters better. Now we don’t know anything about Sam and Rupen and why Notsob wants to destroy everything they love.

• Well what you want to know about them?

• At least something background of both characters and btw. why the villain name is Notsob? That’s a ridiculous name.

• He is born in Boston.

• and…?

• Nevermind, maybe I need to start from the scratch.

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